Affinison

This poem was written by a close friend of mine. I knew her back in 4th grade and I haven't seen her since, but on day she dropped this poem on the ground while she was walking to lunch in 4th grade and I picked it up. I have saved it over the years since she was such a good friend. One day she told me to stop talking to her and I think it was because she was so engrossed in writing more amazing poetry. Although my mom said that it is ghoulish to keep her poem, I thought it was a good idea. She just didn't understand our friendship. I think she was so diligent with other works that she didn't have time to finish this poem, but I will comment on it for my good friend, Jillian Brown.


Have you seen the stars
That once burned so bright
But have grown so cold?
Have you seen the stars
That were once such valuable jewels
But are now just so much glass?
Have you seen the stars
That pointed out the dreams in the dark
But have lost their way?

Commentary:

Line 1: Have you seen the stars

I remember back in 4th grade we went on a field trip to Florhio Zoo. This bus trip extended the duration of 3 hours and by the time we got back the stars were out. I remember Jillian sat three seats in front of me and she was looking at the stars out the window. The stars are even brighter in the kingdom of Affinison. In this far away kingdom lived a young women by the name of Joanne McDillian. Jo had a big dream of being an actress, but no one famous ever came from Affinison. She ran away from home one night under the stars, and decided to go to a town near Florhio called Hollvada. All famous actors and actresses came from Hollvada, it was the perfect place for her to start.

Line 2 and 3: That have once burned so bright but have grown so cold

The kingdom of Affinison was always extremely cold. The stars burnt out kind of in the same way Jo's mother gave up on her dreams. She tried to tell Jo that she couldn't even have a chance of being an actress. When she woke up one morning and Jo was gone she knew Jo had run away. Jo's mother then called up the Affinison police to help find her. Officer Gustav decide he would get on the case. He started off by finding Jo's friends and bribing them to spill what they know. He didn't get any answers, but from the information Jo's mother gave him he figured that he knew where she was going. I just stepped in gum.

Line 5 and 6: That were once such valuable jewels but are now just so much glass

Jo always dreamed off being not only an actress, but rich. Her mother never made very much and Jo never wore expensive clothes like the other kids at the private school in Affinison. Jo was always the brat of the family in some ways, all the other children were happy with what they received.

Line 8 and 9: That pointed out the dreams in the dark, but have lost their way?

I know that Jillian was writing about Joanne at this point. Jillian mentions dreams and also being lost. Jo would have been considered lost by her mother because of her looked to fulfill her dreams. Gustav finally arrived in Hollvada. He found Jo and brought her back to her mother. Jo was very upset about this,but she realized it was only because her mother loved her. She decided to fulfill her dream when she got out of college.